- Intro – extended the beginning definitions of uncommon words such as “secondary discourse”. I also added more of a explanation of my thesis and added to what is was.
- Evidence and explanations – I added some to the area of teaching and how it effects our discourses. added and broke up paragraphs.
- Reorganization – I took one big paragraph and made 3-4 smaller ones. I reorganized the intro paragraph.
- New Paragraphs – there and the middle/ending to brake up the big long paragraph. it helped explain my views without making it be a run-on orbit paragraph that just stays on one subject.
