1. based on my peers comments and that the 1st draft is only story to story at the moment, they don’t quite understand what its about. I have yet to add the filler sentences to put my point in it. the point that I’m trying to get across in mine is how each story although different, has the same concept of the victim.
2. I need to add more to my intros and get more of a intro to each of my quotes.
3. I need to give better transfers between each of the quotes. I have to extend the info between each quote.
